/lit/ - Literature

Sup faggots, can you guys give me some advice for the book I'm writing in terms of theme and plotting.

Basically it's about an early 20 something nerdy guy who's a college drop out, lives with his parents and works a dead end convenience store job. He's pretty unlucky with women as well. However that all changes when he runs into a mysterious man who shows him how truly hollow and empty modern consumerist society is. Together these two transgressive misfits travel America gathering like minded people into their movement that eschews the modern day feminist-capitalism liberal system in favor of a masculine brotherhood that fights the system that oppresses them. In terms of influence my main ones are Fight Club (Palahniuk) and Atlas Shrugged (Rand)

The themes I want to put across are the hollowness of most peoples lives in the capitalist society, the fact that most Americans are blind sheep that follow the governments every word, and the fact that cultural marxism is pussyfying our society.

How can I most effectively marry these themes with the broader narrative without bogging down the story itself? Also what do you think of my concepts?