/lit/ - Literature

I posted a while ago when I'd only done 1 or 2 paragraphs. I've written another, and now I've got ~150 words to end it. I'm planning to finish it with him crying over his dead father, but I'm not sure if that would be too abrupt.

I'm aiming to capture the feeling of rural England in the 18/19th century, and have had images such as pic related in my mind as I've been writing.

http://pastebin.com/MbWR2DFg

>>9080179
Personally I felt this was too description heavy, felt like a chore having to read about how everything in the scene looked, and the descriptions themselves felt basic and YA-like at parts.

I like the scenario though, feels quite dreamlike and vague, reminds me of Keats in a way.

>>9089760
Didn't read it all sorry, but really enjoyed the first few paragraphs. Felt fresh and modern without sounding pretentious and cheap, although I don't like the use of words such as 'millennial' - makes it feel like I'm reading a 4chan post at points.

Overall, 8/10.

>>9091079
>http://pastebin.com/21Ym1HS3

I have literally no idea what's going on lad.