/lit/ - Literature

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We're working together to improve. Don't critique those who don't critique before/along with their piece.

>>13117654
faggot.
>>13114149
This is good. Reminds me of avatar. But like>>13117114 said it needs sharpening. It lost me at a few points.
>>13113816
Insight into the mind of a 120-iq edgelord. I liked it, and the writing is concise at the right times and is crisp, but I wouldn't agree that it was worthwhile writing down.
>>13112785
Awkward. Several of these don't need dialogue tags at all. Can't tell if it's serious or parody.
>>13112553
>>13105578
>and heard her tone bleed such false indifference
>playful swordfight of a conversation
>like the walls of the lounge and the blood of dying children
You're trying too hard to write something "interesting".