/lit/ - Literature

Here's an early draft vs a much more improved version of the same story I'm workin on. Which opening do you think works more? I like the one on the right better just feels much more fleshed out.

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What was it that made you think Tolkien? I'm definitely having some influence from Norse
mythology within my story.

I feel like if you're going for a duology of some kind then maybe 20 povs feels far too much for a first book. I get strong GRRM, and Frank Herbert vibes from your idea but your going to have to probably do something interesting other than political intrigue if you want it to set apart from others that have done the same.