/lit/ - Literature

>>7520739

Yes, but not for the right reasons

Pushkin

Post, critique and discuss.

I'll start. By the way I stole the meter and rhyme scheme from an anon in one of these threads. He had a very nice poem that started with "Sitting in the bloom of May". If you're out there maybro, keep up the good work, I'm a big fan. Stylistically I tried to sound like Pushkin.

Here's my poem.

Through sandy gust and melting snow
I walk along this windy street.
My head held low,
I homeward go,
Hoping that by chance we’ll meet.
My lips on yours once dared to play,
An age ago, or so it seems.
But since that day,
You’ve run away,
Though you still haunt my fever’d dreams.

And so one kiss my fate did seal,
And since that night no rest I’ve had.
It seems unreal,
This hope ideal;
Indeed, it seems that I’ve gone mad.

So soon my heart’s defenses fell!
My use of reason’s all but lost.
I know not well,
Nor care to tell,
What might this hopeful passion cost.

And I do hope, against sound thought,
That I may yet your lover be!
It comes to naught
What I’ve been taught
Or by experience may see.

But as of yet, my hope’s in vain,
For in my haste I angered you.
As if insane,
I brought you pain,
And now repine my hopes undue.

What, then, if you did appear,
As through this vernal wind I walked?
Would you come near,
My words to hear,
Or would your heart and ears be locked?

What hidden thoughts would I confess?
What, stamm’ring, would I dare to say?
Don’t think me less,
Or feel distress,
That I my hopes before you lay.

>>6119130
Nice pattern op with iambic pentameter. Watch your syllables on line 3 thoughI wrote one in IP today too. I posted it in r9k because it's about tfwnogf but I'll post it here too...

Pic related, it's my favorite poet.