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Cool McJones was a freaky cat
She liked to dance and wear big hats
She loved to dance around the town
And how her paws felt on the ground
But everytime she would dance outside
Her enormous hats fell over her eyes
So she danced and pranced with her big hats
Not seeing anything, not this, not that
Until while dancing down the street one day
She felt something in her way
Cool didn't want to lose her groove
But the thing was big, it wouldn't move
So she stopped dancing in a hurry
Lifted up her hat and saw something furry
A big brown dog was fast asleep
Right in the middle of the street!
Cool opened up her mouth to say
"You have to move, you're in my way!"
The dog woke up with a start
And accidentally let out a fart
Cool began to dance and flow
When the dog said, "Wait, please don't go!
I'm new to this town you see,
I don't even have a place to sleep.
Do you think we could be buds?
I like dancing and I like your duds!"
Cool said, "If you can dance and you like hats,
Then in my book you're one cool cat.
I'll be your friend if you want me to,
And we'll dance from here to Timbuktu!
The people of this town, my man
Don't like my dancing, in fact, it's banned!"
"Dancing banned?! What a crime!"
Replied the dog with a whine
Cool said, "Hey now, don't be sad
With two people dancing they can't be mad!
We'll go into town and make them see
That dancing's great, you and me!"
She then saw a tear in the dog's eye
As he looked at her and began to cry
"I'd love to dance and feel the beat
But I just can't do it, I've got four left feet!"
"Everyone can dance you silly pup!"
Cool laughed, "Now c'mon, get up!
First watch me and see what I do
Then you try it, you'll get it too!
Just close your eyes and think up a song
Then move your body, it won't take long!
Let your arms and legs do what they will
That's all it takes, you don't need any skill!"
So Cool danced and pranced and showed him how
And that's when her hat fell over her brow
She kept on going with her jig
And then she tripped over a twig!
The dog rushed right to her aid
And asked her if she was okay
"Don't worry", she said, "yes, I'm fine
That kind of thing happens all the time!
My music comes from inside
So I don't need to use my eyes!"
"That's not safe!", barked the mutt
"You could break a leg, or who knows what!
But I think I might have a plan
He said, while helping her to stand
Me and you, we'll form a team
The best one this town has ever seen!
I'll be your eyes, so just dance free
With me at your side, you don't need to see!"
Cool jumped up real quick
Then went close and gave the dog a lick
"I love your plan", she said, "a real lot.
Now let's go show everyone what we've got.
And no matter what it takes, just know
I promise to teach you to boogie like a pro!"
The dog was cheery, Cool was content
So off into town they went

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Thanks, got that out of the way and did some rephrasing, because yeah, that sentence was awful regardless of what that word was. Ack.

So, forgive me for being this new, but what's the deal with vollmann or o'neill?

H.P. Lovecat
Purrnando Pessoa
Young Werther
Thee Silver Meow Zion Memorial Orchestra & Tra-La-La Band
Odysseus (but wear an eyepatch all the time and call him Outis)
Lucius Aelius Aurelius Commodus Augustus Herculeus Romanus Exsuperatorius Amazonius Invictus Felix Pius (full name of Roman emperor Commodus)
Lady Hunter Blair

I'm not sure if I can ask you /lit/erates about grammar usage but forgive me; I looked around for rules first...

I'm wondering if this is appropriate usage of semicolons:

"...raises a sense of survival; the struggle to go on; the strive to persist."