/lit/ - Literature

Hey /lt/, I have a bit a problem. I love writing and I think I have a modicum of talent for it, just because people usually compliment me on my style. However, every so often, I write something that I think is good and people will just *hate* it. I mean really not like it at all, and I have no idea why.
Does this happen to anyone else? If so, how do you learn to trust yourself on judging yourself even a little objectively?

Here is an example where this happened, does it just objectively suck balls?
https://docs.google.com/document/d/19hhWbEpdst-n75VvxvZgVHbqT_2VdI4UZHUk87pU12w/edit?usp=sharing

I know this is 4chan and people will just shred me for the hell of it, but perhaps someone will help me figure out what makes this piece especially hateful and bad. Thanks for reading