/lit/ - Literature

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A shimmering steel spike curved with a demon smile or an attempt at squawking cliches in hopes or p-rays? I have plucked it from the water w/my brainfist this chirping evening and have taken a peak into your mind's nasty TV toxic crypts—oh man what are its side effects on yrself?

A million speakers carried for thousands of years those words you so limply assembled. You don't even know it. You should be ashamed. What is this? Bukowski runoff?

There is nothing specific to criticize, I have to recommend learning to write like an adult. It really is bad.