/lit/ - Literature

>>20633028
It's 533 fucking words ya goof. Lacking paragraph breaks is as inexcusable as forgetting periods. And yes your colon use is just wrong and part of a pointless sentence to boot.

Agree the em dashes are not incorrect but they are awkward as usually em dashes are used in favor of commas when there is an element of haste, or final addition to a thought, or when there are already a lot of commas flying around a sentence and you want to pop in an appositive without making it confusing.

The piece had some fun ideas behind it but needs polish. Granted it has a "this is my 13 year old anime dream self - I mean dream crush I am writing about" vibes.

>>20633043
>Double em dashes are never correct
I disagree, published authors use them well.

>>20436005
>fellow writers who are as serious as you are
This is my challenge, 99% of those seeking a writing group are mongoloids, spergs, and dabblers who will quit in a week. As a good writer (my mother has confirmed) I can't get much feedback I can take seriously.

And that's not even mentioning the dysfunctional retards who post but refuse to read your stuff (you know who you are).

>>19809175
>I've been found out...

>>19807820
My personal blog post: After rewriting my first chapter 3 times I finally feel like I've had a breakthrough and got some momentum going on the book - things are clicking. My only past novel attempt fell apart due to a lot of beginner mistakes (weak characters, mediocre plotting) but the pieces are all there as with each rewrite I've improved character motivation and long term plotting. I've learned a lot so I see a really clear path forward.

Also I'm really liking the change to 1st person, it's just really refreshing to be so directly in the scene and seems to be helping me with my biggest weakness of making engaging characters (I think still a lot of development needed there). I just hope I can get the end product to match my vision, but feeling optimistic and enjoying the process.