/lit/ - Literature

>>9358493
This isn't so bad, really. With work it could be quite nice. 2/10
>>9358505
Reading this makes me hate you. gj 9/10
>>9358775
I hate the concept of you. 8/10
>>9357594
Fucking disgusting stuff
9/10
>>9359324
Pretty bad. But a bit too on-the-nose
5/10
>>9359346
A bit memey.
6/10
>>9359397
Jesus fucking christ. Misleading syntax. Overwritten. Shit metaphors. Nonsense. Recycling of bland motifs
10/10
>>9359402
Boring as shit
6/10
>>9359418
The potential for this line to actually say something substantial prevents it from being irredeemable
4/10
>>9359437
what
8/10
>>9359441
made me laugh
8/10
>>9359457
too much decent characterization of a potentially real character to be total shit.
Otherwise, "diligently" ruins a lot of what could have made it good, bumping it from a 2 to a 5/10
>>9359460
Fucking relativist. I hate relativists
Therefore I give this 8/10
but that's subjective
>>9359470
pathetic
7/10
>>9359482
poor 6/10
>>9359485
kek
N/A
>>9359487
bad, but memey
4/10
>>9359496
sexually frustrated 16 y.o. pynchon
6/10
>>9359522
pretty bad
but cuck meme
5/10
>>9359746
shit meme
no bonus points
0/10
>>9359754
19 y.o. /b/tard herman hesse
8/10
>>9360077
it's okay
5/10
>>9360591
dude
7/10
>>9360767
gross and dumb
if i saw this in a published book i would kill myself
7.5/10
>>9360937
weak and pathetic fatalism/10
>>9360964
YA money grab/10
>>9361561
not even sure i finished reading that sentence
8/10
>>9361563
is my heart supposed to swoon or something?
7.5/10
>>9361574
actually not bad, leaving it at a 1/10 -- until "his whole world was a gutter". It ruins everything.
6/10
>>9361577
so meta so dumb
8/10
>>9361585
fucking weebs
>>9361588
It started off redeemable. But got worse. And worse. Got even worse after that. I hate this. 9/10

>>9088781
>tfw it actually went in the Google Drive trash bin