/lit/ - Literature

Just curious as to what you guys think.
Constructive criticism is encouraged.
I just recently started feeling a lot more creative with my writing and I tend to write poems on my phone when I'm working and I camw up with this one today. Just want some honest opinions I guess because I can't trust my own judgement.

Each day that goes by
I see the iridescent sky
Shining like gems.
Oh what an oblivion of hymns.
It's so eccentric, It's so right.

Even at night
The diamonds glow bright
With an everlasting flow
Of beauty to show
Me the right kind of life
To end this strife.

No longer diseased.
I now feel relieved
With my eyes wide open.
I see what is true.
The kingdom of God
Lies within you.

Not in a box
Made of wood and nails.
It's all in the heart.
We must all make our own trails.
To see is to be free.
Honesty is the key.
Freedom comes with the mind
Of being gentle and kind.

You know that bright star in space?
The one we all share.
It is what gives us all life.
It is what ends all the strife.

So don't follow blind faith.
Just let the sun brighten your path.
The stars will guide and pave.
Now just let your mind be saved.