/lit/ - Literature

Just one more thing: Sinking someplace in everyday life, in ordinariness, carrying his longing into the confines of bourgeois parlors, hunched over, kneeling in the dark, not wanting to be different, constrained and satisfied, covered by day and night, returned home from journeys Into the metaphysical – light of gentle eyes above him, wide, shining deep into his heart, to nourish the remnant of mad airs of Heaven – music of countless common sounds, like the roots of silent birch trees, that strike strongly into your blood, gone are the tumultuous fanfares that carry you into adventure and fatigue, awake in the morning, know your work, your day's work, fixed, mute to all enticement, blind to all that intoxicates and makes you drunk, no more excursions into the cloudy, plain as a child that weeps and laughs, entwining with every little thing, refreshed as from the bath, abandoned to the vast condition of life.

He hasn't read Keyerling's South American Meditations ...

https://archive.org/details/southamericanmed035513mbp/page/n63/mode/1up

>psychotic episode passes
>or did it?

>>17360719
More brain grease to lubricate the meat grinder.

>>17353854
There is none.

capcha keeps eating my comment and I want this guy on writing general to know I like his stuff. If this doesnt work fuck it:

>>16894847
This is my third time writing this cause captcha keeps eating my posts. I love what you wrote here. It as the stripped-back, quick, and direct feel of a Borges story. Not to put a too fine a point on it, but I think your primary virtue is quickness. I have to disagree with >>16896894
since I think his rendition is inferior. But if what you mean by >>16897235 is that you cant write dialogue, then you should work on that. Recasting natural language is the duty of a writer imo. Keep it up anon. And keep in mind im not just licking your boots; I can tell I like someone's stuff when I feel a well of black envy in my stomach. Anyway, good stuff :).

>>16896894
I can't write like that, regrettably. I have to tell, not show. I have to keep my narrator at a distance and I have to filter everything through his nasal voice. You are right though: I have to make things more dynamic. I like parts of the last sentence: "He did not find an ear with this objection, however, and while he was still speaking, he had put a big gumdrop between his teeth". Playing with time and the sequence of events seems to be a possible way of making things more dynamic. Thanks for your effort, anon.