/lit/ - Literature

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Thanks so much for your feedback, anon! I am very glad so much of it worked. As for it becoming 'comical', I definitely am trying to make the villains as astonishingly vile as possible (for thematic purposes). That being said, I think it would seem less hammy had you read the 10k words leading up to this point. Time is spent making Neville sympathetic.

I will revisit the section though, to see if there's anything I can change to prevent the sequence becoming silly. :)

Thanks again for your feedback.