/lit/ - Literature

Good morning or good evening depending on where you are, hope you good sirs and ladies are all in good health and are wearing a smile today. Weeks ago, I descended upon this forum in a highly brash and irritating manner, my initial incursion fueled a deep desire to receive feedback, helping me critique my work, demanding I squeeze more effort out of myself.

After a thorough pummeling at the hand of /lit/'s most eloquent wordsmiths, I reached down, grabbed my prolapsed bussy, stuffed it back in and pulled my trousers up in one easy motion. Returning here, at this moment, to receive another thorough bashing, perhaps one that will finally break a buck under that metaphorical hot 'bama sun. Maybe it is just the sleep deprivation or the mental illness, I cannot tell, but if you'd be so kind as to observe the pair of links below. At one time I wrote a draft and thought it was good. It was shit. Please, look at it, it is like the game Pong, functional as a back-and-forth, but lifeless, not an open world. I hope in my latest version I have weaved something interesting, something that shows one man's journey to the redpill about urban life. It is terrible, to witness those who fall through the cracks, even worse if you fall through them yourself.

https://jason-bryan.com/wp-content/uploads/2020/11/TheShitkickers-Chapter1.pdf
>this is the earlist rough draft I have

Compare the above to my most recent work below, any and all feedback is appreciated:

https://jason-bryan.com/wp-content/uploads/2021/08/tsk-chap1-new.pdf
>most recent work, please review and give feedback, thank you

>>18857464
Gradner your shit is terrible, learn to draw you piece of shit.

I have a simple request. I need a book that analyses talent. Do you have any suggestion?

Why are posts here written so poorly despite being a literature board? There's no difference between the quality of writing on this board and other boards. In fact /fit/ and /int/ write far better. Why is that the case?

The more I read philosophy, the more it surprises me. What's the motivation of philosophers for all these extreme hard work? I can only imagine how much they had to squeeze their brain to map out ideas as complex as these. And they required a highly disciplined lifestyle, similar to the military. All for what? Obviously not recognition or money. Then?