/lit/ - Literature

Alright well my shit isn't done yet but I figure why not post and see what sorts of things you guys say.
My first book was absolute dogshit. This is my second attempt at a story and instead of 2k words a chapter I'm shooting for 5k to actually reach the length of a full book once I finish.
Still got loads of editing to go through and the last few chapters definitely need some work, but if you read the prologue and tell me what you think I'll appreciate that much.

>https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/80202/st-venture