/lit/ - Literature

>>14280227
I'm already in love with the subject matter. I think it would have been better if you kept to a tighter meter, because it read a bit haphazardly. Unless that was what you were going for. The rhyming adds to the humour, so well done there. And the last line really hits home. Great poem, but I think you need to read a little more if you want to rhyme and use meter because it's not really there yet. However, I loved your sense of humour and the timing was perfect. 80/100

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