/lit/ - Literature

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Those are some very good starting essay passages. I would suggest a few changes just from those isolates passages as by themselves, but I doubt my changes would alter positively the finished product, besides a few little pieces. One, for example, “O compatriots and fellow man, how can I be understood? O muse, give me thy voice so that thy servant may speak to heal!” The essay speaks in a style addressed to the modernity of the twenty-first century, yet reverts to this style of poetry outdated by a hundred years, if not a little longer. But, of course, that could be taken clearly as your dedication and passion to include this style dotted in your work, which is understandable (it reminds me very much of one of my favourite writers, Robert Burton), but I feel it would be more thematic and strenuous on you to emulate that old style, almost as if it were satire you were enacting in this style that can only be addressed by the given formality that what style you are writing in is in a way “safely” older, than if you were to write a poetic style more your own. And also, in a general concern, though I would feel a little biased in both agreeing with and against you on it, that you should try and modernise your writing style tailored to your own actually altogether. But that is obviously stepping stones in preference to your ideal vision of the essay piece and the taking of whichever direction you would like to see this essay’s style take. I genuinely liked the excerpts and hope to see it finished.