/lit/ - Literature

>>19952249
>>19952010
>Maybe you can elaborate on the supposed structural issue that is a fundamental flaw.
You mean the ones that I immediately called out with several examples?

>Good essays lay out clear plans of intended attack and signpost what they're doing and why
>[Your essay is missing] crucial elements like topic sentences or a thesis statement
>I have no clue, by the end of page one,
>>What it is you're arguing,
>>How you intend to prove the points you're arguing, and
>>What examples you'd like to use to make that case and why you think they're worth bringing up
An essay that fails at the above has failed. You get one page to hook the reader, and good essays don't waste time meandering or being unclear. If that page can't deliver some notion of what their argument is, define their key terms, and set up clear expectations of how the argument will continue, readers in the know take this as a serious red flag and fuck off.

All this weakness comes before we even consider red-lined grammar and phrasing fuckups - the paper comes off as sloppy and amateurish, even as a pastime, because there's a clear lack of familiarity with the craft of writing on display.

The writer would benefit from seeking out other essayists and learning from their work, because it seems clear to me he hasn't read many essays and doesn't have a clear idea what they're meant to look or sound like.