/lit/ - Literature

>>4378398
slap

first of all i dislike edgy suicide-core 'this will get their attention' openers. like 'he woke up very hungover, barely remembering what he did last night, but with one wrist in handcuffs and the other smeared with lipstick.' stupid. like the pic i attached, which is deviant-art-angsty-teenager-core. the pic itself is cliche as fuck, let alone its literary equivalent

second, gratuitous repetition of the 'p' in that first clause. obviously babby's first time learning about literary concepts and trying to apply them.

third, conceptually it doesnt make sense. he's going to die, and accept obliteration, but you are saying he sees a life through the noose? wait, no, not a life, but a "portrayal" of a life? what is this portrayal? is it a model train thing, or a cartoon?

>>3365359
22 soon enough. i'm gonna cut all my hair off tonight too. my 14yearold cousin asked if i was having a midlife crisis already. i didn't even know that much when i was 14.