/lit/ - Literature

Good afternoon /lit/. I wrote this poem yesterday and I'd really like to hear your opinions on it. I know you'll hate it most likely, but this is the internet, so I can take all of this with a grain of salt.

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Here it is:


Do think my mind sees you when the eyes are closed.
Like a smile in shades of dust and icy vapors.
The constant clicking of the train.
And the broken glass liquid in your cheeks.

You don’t bleed.
Blue light wards off sleep.
And your leftover fingers all over soft faces.
Plastic guts.

Rubber skin.
I’ve worked on you for so long.
I’ve seen you grow in pieces.
Daylight won’t know us.

Lesser things will be ignored.
We will manage in the cold.
I tried to make you beautiful.
Made you like Eden in copper.

Made you so.
Made you so places that don’t want us
Can become unnecessary
And obsolete.

I hope your lights turn on.
I hope you’ll be better than those who made me.