/lit/ - Literature

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>It's fine, anon. I have to say that it's hard to judge something from just a paragraph.
I have more but they're in dire need of rewriting because I'm a dumb ESL and haven't read enough yet to be capable of properly writing something even remotely coherent.
>To nitpick: if you're deliberately going for an archiac kind of feeling, it's not quite coming across for me.
That isn't my intention, it's mainly because I recently started reading older authors.
>The connection between these two things doesn't seem exactly clear to me. Just because someone doesn't have a reason to do something doesn't mean that what they're doing isn't wrong. Also, everyone always has a reason for doing something, and you foreshadow what his is in the next sentence.
That's just me being a dumbass and not being able to think or express myself properly in english.
>That being said, you shouldn't really be as neurotic about your writing as I am being here. You'll never get anywhere. It's serviceable for now, at least.
Thank you, anon. I'll try reading and writing more until I write something that's at least decent. I have a good reason to be neurotic, because, as I mentioned before, I'm and ESL and I want to improve.