/lit/ - Literature

>>20306177
it's just boring. nobody cares about some random people going to a store. i read the first few sentences and that's it. holy shit; be more ambitious. also, sibling sex has been done before by ian mcewan.
write about aliens or something.
or if that's too unoriginal, then how about a twist in which a super taboo situation turns out to be normal. in other words, later they learn that they are not biological siblings. and maybe the guy fucks a dog. but later it turns out it was a woman in a convincing dog costume. then he tries to fuck in public, which is illegal, but it turns out that the park he is in is private property that he unknowingly owns the deed to. he constantly tries to have taboo sex only for it to turn out to be completely vanilla.
it took me zero seconds to think of this and it has never been done before. it's not that difficult to be original.