/lit/ - Literature

>>15152326
To Alcoholics Anonymous?

https://aaboston.org/meetings

>>8754484
Preposition Ratio: 9.86 %
Dynamic!

Zombie Nouns:

attention
tension
collection
station
imagination

Lexical Diversity: 45.67 %

Content Carrying Words: 50.52 %

Personal Vocab Diversity: 68.84 %

Longest word: automatically

>>7852728

Preposition Ratio: 12.13 %

Zombie Nouns: extension, position

Lexical Diversity: 40.12 %

Content Carrying Words: 53.19 %

Personal Vocab Diversity: 60.82 %

Longest Word: Subconsciously

This is the 3rd X 'subconsciously' has popped up as the LW in the pastebins. That can't be a good thing.

▲ Using the # of ciggies smoked as characterization immediately triggers 'edgy highschooler', which if you are that, fine (nothing wrong w/that), but if yr in uni(+), grow up.

▲ 'makeshift coffee mug-ashtray hybrid' → 'makeshift coffee mug-ashtray'

▲ ¶ Jim ¶ Jim ¶ Jim ¶ Jim

▲ 'but ever since the stroke he had a few years ago in December' → 'but ever since his stroke'

▲ 'succumbed' ← there has got to be a better way

▲ Pretty good, interesting, tight grammar, you know HOW to write, etc, etc. And yes, continue. It feels like it could go somewhere when you figure out what it's about.

>>7418707
I'm doom'd 2 tell ye I can only taste the lemma—yet they were delish-yes. When mi brain whirs the haus burns & somehow lexical exuberance throbs in my head and I kin pick up the words of worldkin kwikly and the broken taste tastes good, mon ami, mein Freund, Ich bin Freuds verstümmelt Aale.

Check out Bernays's Propaganda & Crystallizing Public Opinion. Skip Gladwell, Bernays did it better, and Gladwell had the balls to bitch about him in his fucking New Yorker obituary when The Tipping Point is section for section Propaganda. God, I hate Gladwell...

>>7208380
Melted me w/boredom holy fuck. The language boils down to 26 little faces, all screaming silently at yr keyboard there and ye pressed them into lazzy adj tangled sentences tucked w/even more adj.

My skull creaks in sorrow for this kind of sad, trying, reaching wound of a work. Maybe you will improve over time, maybe not. I can tell you that no one will ever care more than I.

>>6963422
I like yr theme but it's a mess. Maybe I'm projecting but isn't the point to transfer yr ideas into the reader's head? I felt like I was 12 again, trying to make out tits through the scramble Spice channel.

Again, I like the idea. Most people aren't going to work for it though. Channel John Greene: he has SEVENTEEN MILLION DOLLARS. Don't be afraid 2b understood!