/lit/ - Literature

>>6818497

6/6

>>6818472

> Still irritating.

Sorry that you are irritated.

> You haven't typed this out?

Clearly not. I never type out my exercise stories.

> Nobody cares that you're the torchbearer for teh fucking long s.

I got in the habit a while ago and since my T's and short S's can look similar, and since it's easy to tell a short s ending from a t ending in context, I use long the long S. It's just an F without the cross, and it's easy on the hands for me to write. I don't have any motive other than it being habit and rather fun to write with.

>>6811736

starts off with way too much summarization. There's no joy in uncovering meaning or context in this, it's served to the reader on a plate. Not that you should write for an audience, per se, but you should certainly not summarize unless you know what you're doing and are a skilled writer.

You can write but you should simplify for a while. You could portray half that scene more elegantly:

> Maj sat in the grass and chewed a grilled sprig of gelgrain.

the next sentence is fragmented and turns the character into more of your puppet than anything.

> Sarca appeared to have no problem with the idea of meat; he tore at a sheet of dried jerky formerly stored in a pouch on his saddle, which sat beside him on the ground.

how about

> Sarca had no beef with the idea of meat

okay jokes aside

> Sarca tore at a sheet of dried jerky, appearing to have no problem with the idea of meat.

just a rough lathing