/lit/ - Literature

>>10480476
Thanks thats the type of loser I was going for except...
>>10480929
Yeah it really goes far on the edgy side doesn't it? I REALLY didn't mean for that to happen but it happened anyway. I wrote this with a vague lot, vague characters, some events I wanted to do and some ideas I wanted to express( I have never undertook a project of this scale before). As I was 20,000 words in I noticed I really wanted to punch my main character. Especially during the (and I say with the biggest "" possible) "philosophical rants". Jesus Fucking Christ, I didnt mean for those to come out the way they did it was the just the best way I knew how to get the message across, it really showed me how bad a writer I was. I dont know why I didnt realize sooner. Maybe I looked at for too long, maybe I got distracted by something, maybe it's from the narcolepsy caused by sudden surges of existential dread that keep me awake at night. Nonetheless I didnt catch my own ineptitude in time so i said fuck it lets just roll with it and thus was born the ungodly monstrosity you see before you.
So instead of making it good I at least want to know if it's interesting.
Does the intro accomplish these three things: Grab your attention, establish the character, establish the setting in an interesting and concise manner?
Do you want to keep reading?
Do the characters have unique voices that you can tell apart?
Is what I'm saying clear?
If I ever write a sequel hopefully I can take these lessons with me. (although writing this book was INCREDIBLY painful)

Also it's a fucking honor to be compares Dostoevsky. I am going that in mind and masturbate furiously until the skin starts to peel off.

>>6591601
This is a far cry from talking art theory/critique/general art sharing.

Their later stuff was more pop rock wasn't it?
I liked the Cocteau Twins feel from their early albums

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SYzfT1zmAGg

I'm looking for a patient editor/critique who will stick around for this teenager to write up his fantasy and critique them and hopefully build up a trusting editor to writer relationship. Anyone willing to do that for me?