/lit/ - Literature

First time ever coming here. Don't know why I'm bothering but everyone I would normally go to for this is asleep and I'd like some feedback on a story I just wrote.

http://sladebacon.tumblr.com/post/30702267277

Not going to explain anything (because everything that needs to be explained is at the beginning of the post) other than that it's probably a ten minute read at average speed.

So if you've got the time, give it a read, and let me know what you think. I appreciate all feedback/criticism/praise/scorn/whatever the fuck.

Pic slightly related I suppose

hey /lit.
im lonely and depressed, can you recommend me some books?

>>1192750

Fictional discourse is often much more engaging and stimulating, even if I'm not involved in the conversations.

Real people will rarely, if ever, listen to anything I have to say.