/lit/ - Literature

>mfw people allow themselves to be moved emotionally by events that are outside of their own control

Absolutely cucked

Stoicism as described in Epictetus is the end of practical philosophy. There is no need to go further or to read much.

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I deleted my last reply on accident; OKAY!
A lot of run-on sentences. Trim that shit or add full-stops.

Work on your tense. You jump between present and past infrequently
ex:
>A soft orange glow escapes the foggy windows. he jumped off his horse...
Should be:
>A soft orange glow escaped the foggy windows. he jumped off his horse...
Also, a glow is already soft bitch; redundant.\

>smell of alcohol and wet wood.
Idk how old you are, but bars don't permeate with alcohol
They reek of BO, grilled food and tobacco; I'd fix that. However, I do like the phrase "wet wood."

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>his steps hammered on the floorboard, which was the only noise beside the rain.
I've never known a bar to be quiet. May talk about what day it is, the journey or longevity of the strangers week. I don't know where he's been or how long he has been with his companions. This reads more like the opening scene in a screenplay than a novel.

Overall, the bones are there; refine.