/lit/ - Literature

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>>18844342
Damn why is this board so mean? Why? What's the point guys?

>>18831802
Things are going great anon, spent a bunch of time with my kids, been editing, getting ready to move

How's your life going anon? Everything cool?

>>18801826
Heard of editing?

>>18776675
There are online forms that can do that for you,

Also, EDITPLUS+ has a robust "find and replace" feature.

>>18759815
Yeah I had been thinking about the cliche aspect of waking up, my alternate beginning was he was going to be on hold with the non-emergency line to report someone moaning in distress in the alley on drugs, and he lays back on his couch and tries to sleep while kept awake at night by noise, describing it as getting worse and worse over the time he has been dating his girlfriend, finally he falls asleep at dawn and sleeps in until noon, where the book starts now.

I was chatting with someone recently at a nearby coffee shop, and they were saying the best thing you can do in an opener is immediately set the tone for the story with the most powerful opening punch you can. They really didn't provide any examples specifically, though, and even said Stephen King in particular has bland opening lines. Come to think about it, I've read a ton of fiction in my life and I can't remember a particularly stunning opener. I really loved Dean Koontz growing up as a teen, but don't remember any lines in particular.

Definitely looking at cutting words whenever I can! I've been editing and editing and stopping for a couple days before re-diving in, working out the flow and such, but I don't want to be a perfectionist, just enough words so that the reader can envision what's happening without being like you're reading a menu.

A thai food bowl
example 1
>orange, nearly transparent noodles fill the dish, their broad width mostly hidden under a layer of chicken and spicy sauce. A mountain of green cilantro for garnish sits under a white paper sheathe holding some fine chopsticks that lay across the bowl.
>example 2
The white bowl sits in front of him, steaming away, the hustle-and-bustle of the thai restaurant fading as his eyes and concentration focus on the scent of his meal. Lifting the chopsticks, pulling them from their paper pocket emblazoned with the restaurant's regal logo, the wood had a fine grain and felt polished between his fingers. Poking around the bowl, seared chicken with the skin on glistened with caramelized pastel green sauce. A trendy west coast fusion, wide pad thai noodles covered in chicken and green curry sauce would make a chef from the homeland bluster and shake his head. An arrogant amount of garnish proving the chef too ambitious to be taken seriously.
>example 3
The steamy noodle bowl arrives, complete with fancy chopsticks and the soapy odour of too much cilantro.
>example 4
Ken ordered a noodle bowl nervously. Minutes later, it arrived and didn't look anything like chicken pad thai he had before. A huge mound of cilantro and posh chopsticks, it smelled more like curry. They also forgot his spring rolls. His head swivels around for the waiter, it's so busy in here that Ken feels hopeless, but this also means he can drink from his flask without worry of being caught.

I like to plotfag it up by writing in style 3, upon edit I try and do style 1 without turning into style 2, which happens when I OVER-edit. I hate OVER-editing.

>>18744313
Having kids is amazing, anyone on here who is anti-natalist to post a photo. They never will because they are ugly and/or fat.

>>18736501
I think you are the one who needs help, considering you are not creating or adding any value to this /wg/ :)

>>18701013
Waldun's gonna make it bros!

>>18684023
Yes sir, have a great day anon!

>>18657609
/wg/ is getting better and better because the crabs who pull others down are being revealed for what they are:
>non-producers
>"i'll write my book someday, anon, and my writing is better than yours"
>ngmi
>blind hate on others' writing in bad faith

Luckily there are bipolar maniac schizos like me who are impervious to your demoralizing effects. Let's fucking do this, writers and authors of /Lit/, we're going to keep writing, keep producing, and get our fucking self-expressed books out into the world and there is NOTHING the pseuds and non-producers of /Lit/ can do about it other than cry like bitches about how horrible our writing is.

>>18641790
Thanks anon, I'll give it a read. Going to listen to my critics on /Lit/ and really try harder on my 3rd novel.

>>18641273
Giving up at 22???

Holy fuck man... I'm 43 and still have the spice of life in me! You have SO much more ahead of you anon.

>>18599501
Psychologically damaged idiot here, got a PO box I can send a book to?

>>18549733
Do not hurt yourself.
This plane we are on... this reality... it is all fake. There is so much evil just under the surface getting us to pleasure chase and distract us from the truth.
Man... don't be jealous. I suffered greatly in my time... yes, I had more pleasure, but I also had much, much more pain.

Godspeed anon

>>18542773
I like it.
Let's see something you wrote, faggot?

>>18534275
Trad pub has gone completely IDpol.
>Making money is the focus
Anything that sells is what they put out. What sells is everything that is as woke as possible. There is a reason why black women keep winning writing awards in Canada, it is because those are the people sought out to be the cultural leaders.

>>18530260
Thanks friend, first time I've ever shared so that means a lot.