/lit/ - Literature

I wrote this love poem for my oneitis. I don't read poetry myself but her Twitter and Instagram bios say she likes poetry.

My sweet darling angel,
Pumpkin-sweet, so painful
It is to be apart
From you; it breaks my heart.
Be mine, O sweet-lipped muse,
And gratefully I'll use
Thine eyes as star-specked pools
To deliver needed cools
To this flaming heart.

As people who read literature, what are your thoughts?

Pic somewhat related, my oneitis looks a bit like Björk.