/lit/ - Literature

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I enjoyed it, thought the imagery of wind was very tastefully used without delving too much into melodramatic Rupi Kaur territory.

I am a sucker for medieval imagery, even though you came dangerously close to ripping off Tolkien's Lament for the Rohirrim with your horse/rider/horn blowing. I'll just imagine that was designed as an homage rather than a direct lift.

>the sharp thrust of a spear, awakening me for the first time
>closing my Gadarene rush through the rolling years
is a phenomenal line, I only wish you had nailed the next couple to do it justice. Endings are of course difficult, and pulling a Robert Frost and going for repetition is always a temptation, but I think it could have been avoided. Still, enjoyed it, thought it was one of the stronger poems from the issue.