/lit/ - Literature

>>23404635
Not a period piece, actually cyberpunk-ish in a world of my design. But thanks! I saw your post in the last /wg/. So the biggest issue I have with it is, first of all, the fact you only posed a small snippet which makes it hard to look at things like prose and character. However, going off of what you posted, and given your love for Alastair Reynolds, I can see you love the jargon-loaded prose that he's known for.

In my opinion, even if you're writing hard sci-fi, there still needs to be a human component to the text that transcends the jargon loaded prose that a lot of the authors in this genre are known for. The thing that will seperate you from this rest is relying less on appealing to those sorts of people, and instead focusing on universal truths like character, allusions to greater texts and history and simple, basic facets of human existence (fear of death, Oedipus etc) rather than overloading the reader with terminology that filters anybody out of the know. Idk i am drunk and I can give more in depth feedback if you post more.

>>23406253
This is lesbian aristocracy but also much much more. It's incredibly spiritual. I am the guy that posts a lot of it. However, I am trying to be a bit more plot focused. Believe it or not I listen to the feedback people give me in /wg/ and here, although it's a first draft, I tried to be a bit more active.

Pitchwise, in the simplest wording possible, given its absurd length and depth: picrel. Although this is a very VERY badly worded description of everything that happens.