/lit/ - Literature

>>22359510
"Better have that first payment and
it better not be in lead!”

That's cool! You have talent, definitely. I just feel like you're rushing through your story a bit. You need to describe more, and let tension build. Otherwise you'll do things like try to make us sympathise and like your MC by having him beat-up a dog-abuser. That's a little cheap, imo. Let the MC mull it over, and only intervene grudgingly at the last second. That would be my advice.