/lit/ - Literature

Submitting my writing on /lit/ for the very first time! The story is about a city where gradually more and more girls start to turn into Yandere. The girl named Inokai is supposed to be a girl who was caught after murdering her friend for some guy. But rather than put her into juvy, the government erases her memory and puts her into a test facility to see how this Yandere "virus" acts. The facility is a giant building that has an indoor built highschool and dormitory. Inokai falls for a test subject guy, and gets into conflict with another girl over him, so she tries to sneak around at night to murder her. Scientists are of course going to stop her before she does it, but they are still monitoring her actions. Inokai is some random guy who got stuck in the facility too, just for shits and giggles. Still need to write a reason for why. But, the reason why Inokai doesn't know the city is because of him being an outsider, and the facility has not realized of their mistake yet. So anyway, the purpose of this scene is to show the scientists girls with the Yandere disease have volatile commitment, and basically go after whichever guy seems available. Sorry if this is really fucking stupid or confusing.

>Why im doing this
Want to be professional script writer one day. Always thought writers for movies and tv shows were the most important role. My art fucking sucks, so I want to see if i can make it as a script writer before attempting to get into drawing again. Really want to learn what makes good scenes and stories and such. If i fail, ill probably be some crappy comic artist or visual novelist in the future.
>My /lit/ background
Never read any books outside of English class. Have only read manga and watched anime whole life. Pls no bully. Pls help me git gud.