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They decided to put the Deputy on the right track. They went to the deputy and showed him all the evidences. Deputy was shocked to see all the evidences against him. Javier and his friends told the Deputy to help them or else they would publish all the evidences on the media and he would face the consequences. Javier said: “when these evidences would get published on the Tv, what would your kids thought about you? They would think that their father was a corrupt man who was not performing his duty honestly and was helping the criminals. Then, what would you do?” Deputy realized his mistake and started crying. Javier asked him to do his job with honor. Deputy asked him about the plan. He told the Deputy to give them the permission to clear out the lairs of the drug mafia. Deputy gave them the permission to clear the lairs of the mafia.

I know there are grammar errors, but ignoring that. Is there any way I can make this exciting?

The topic is "3 friends are shopping in a mall when something happens and they get shocked".

I need to write a story that's 8 pages long on this topic. I'm thinking of a mall shooting. Any ideas?