/lit/ - Literature

Is my writing style any good or nah (the main character is about to drink a vial of dragon's blood)

>"It had somehow remained warm throughout the dormant centuries in its vial, an inner motive force compelling it to produce a subtle heat, an echo of the fire which erupted out of the long-dead beast from which this life-blood was procured.
Enneron hesitated, staring into the depths of the liquid, and with a final breath, drank down a mouthful of the vial of blood.
>The sickly liquid slid uneasily down his throat, threatening to choke him, so cloying was the ichor. The entirety of the vial's contents drank, Enneron felt a change begin to occur. Subtle at first, then a steady vibration began to spread from his core to the tips of his fingers, building to a crescendo.
>New pathways formed, new elements of the psyche shattered into being, latent faculties awakened, and a metabolic spike flushed the blood through his entire body with the force of a thousand suns.