/lit/ - Literature

>>8307817
But the way you wrote it is infinitely more dull and doesn't serve the narrative well enough for me.
But point taken, I understand the criticism coming my way and I see what you see, and understand where I have made the mistake.
I'll post part 2 and 3 next thread because part 2 is very short and although part 3 has some of the heaviest prose I have ever written and deals with the heaviest themes in the story, it also ties directly with the ending and is a direct continuation from part 2. Hopefully there are some who are not overwhelmed by such prose, eh?