/lit/ - Literature

Alright /lit/ I'm an English major looking for someone to read a poem honestly -- be here for q's and crits. Lots of references to big sean's High so if you want to get it all look up the lyrics. I'm pretty happy with it so far but I want to make it the best it can be so please, critique away.
It's a pantoum, though I've left it imperfect. Modifying the lines this way made the structure fit with the lyrical underpinnings. This will probably be turned in at my small conservative university and unless I pull it off perfectly I'll probably be dragged out of the classroom for the amount of marijuana references.
It's time to go
--Thanks Big Sean & Wiz

Right now I know where my heart will stay
so I don’t give a fuck what you’re telling me
I held her here, right next to me
but then I went and blew it all away

I didn’t give a fuck what she was telling me,
just on my bed, we spent all day
but then I blew it all away
I’d desired her, but she wanted me.

Now on my bed, I spend all day
I’m up in the clouds, keep a girl to please
I fuck her, keep her far from me
only wish that I’d figured another way

We’d been up in the clouds, she was for me
But when we blew, I blew it away
Now I wish that I could find a way.
take a drink and stop fucking telling me.