/lit/ - Literature

New to /lit/. Who is this and why does everyone hate him?

Where were you when this man destroyed metaphysics?

>>12573977
This

How do we defeat skepticism? I’ve been having nightmares about this guy ever since I read his shitty little book. How do I kill him?

>>11847093
>He couldn’t quite understand why he was there or what his intention was.
This is an okay line phonetically but not a good opening in my opinion. I'm just getting told what isn't there rather than what is. It's all negative information. You can be murky if you like, but there has to be something real at the bottom of everything, otherwise it just looks vacuous.

>he had always let fear overtake him. He would show up. But this time he did.
What? "He usually ate cheerios for breakfast, but this time, he overcame his fear and ate cheerios for breakfast." Why is there a "But"?

>To let out some form act. Of action.
An act? Of action?

>Post structural dialogue plays itself out.
good tune

I understand the kind of buildup you're going for here, but too much of this is just empty. Either that or I get told/soapboxed something which could've been shown instead.

>>11847435
The first line could be moved into the next paragraph. The word "solemnly" could be cut, and you could change the "and stepped" to something like "before stepping" to progress better. Constant conjunction is not causality. I don't need to see one pool ball move into the other AAAND then see the other move away; I need the pop in the middle, when they clash, or at least some kind of conditionality instead of plain old one-thing-then-the-next-thing.

The greeting line rewinds me; I see Isaac greet the scout, then I'm directed towards the limestone fountain where the scout is sitting, but then I'm given specification pertaining to the greeting, which I'd already played out.

Semicolon after glass, and then I'd change the "and" before "Harris" to a "then."

I didn't immediately make the connection that the swirling storm was supposed to be the dust from the coaches.

>>11821915