/lit/ - Literature

>>7478740
From the book description: "Get it now for your loved ones, or don’t, I don’t care, I don’t love them."

I can tell you don't care, Rory, I can tell. Yes, the art calls up memories of Scary Stories to Tell in the Dark, but the writing... I'll just say Rory Donahoe needs to be introduced to a professional editor. In the final story, the grammar is so broken you can't discern the meaning of entire sentences.

An example: "As I walked down the opposite side of the road it always lead me by a few hundred feet, always out of sight, always in the dark."

Then you have the multitude of typos that could have been caught by a simple, inexpensive proofread: "They legs bent at awkward angles and moved in a strange frenetic gait slowly toward me - sizing me up." Which makes me wonder... how were the legs sizing the narrator up?

I won't go into heavy detail on the repetition of words problem. Suffice it to say there's one story were the word "walked" is used four times in one short paragraph.

The stories themselves are not bad. In fact, "The Leak" is rather creepy. I think with a solid edit, these stories could be molded into something special. But only if Rory learns to care

>>7362372
>this post

>>7163141
>game design

>>7112685
My sides dear god

>>7098927
>writing post-modern trash
>not embracing new sincerity

>>6650322
>being a weeabo
>thinking his opinion matters

>>4577916
nig emtrsp

>>3843526
This. MFW when Americans don't realize theirs is a planned economy.