/lit/ - Literature

>>21524396
>Why doesn't /wg/ share their stories anymore?
I miss this energy too. More than a few of those random excerpts were mine and I got pretty evenly distributed feedback between the categories of very constructive, generic but supportive, and actively harmful so generally pretty worth it.

I posted less during the restart arc or last summer/fall but may start again. But at the same time I don't think it's advisable to leave your entire manuscript up for scrutiny at once/updated live - better to give a decent sized sample you can take feedback go heart on and apply yourself.

>>21337764
Competently written enough at a technical level which is promising. Your prose/description and what you choose to put on center stage could use work though in my opinion:
>dialogue
Very Maid & Butler/"as you know Bob". Consider making this less like a movie (slower start, show thoughts/summarized knowledge rather than explain in dialogue, perhaps less characters on stage at start)
>Descriptions
Solid first draft of ideas but go through on an edit pass and condense this all down to tigher more concrete/sensory oriented Descriptions.

Have you started reading up on writing craft? If not read articles on Filtering, Specificity ("the sound of lumber being cut"->"the wet smacking sound of hatchets working fresh timber") and using stronger verbs.

I bother to give all this feedback because you seem to have some talent so please take all this rambling as encouragement/trying to give you resources rather than any insult.

>>21261634
No problem and I wouldn't mind any suggestions on this flash fiction (960 words) from you or others. It's something I spun off from a scene I really liked in book I'm working on, closest thing to horror I'll probably ever manage: https://pastebin.com/UFEm0EPe

>>21261794
Something I try to do is "scout out" the scene before hand. Basically play it out in your imagination, replaying it over and over, all while jotting down rough outline notes (key descriptions and dialogue lines). Then I go back and draft it out properly.