/lit/ - Literature

>>15370022
This is what I think is an example of a poem getting lost in it's own imagery. Try to focus more on what you're conveying rather than the scenery, descriptions of scenery, etc. Again, my own personal taste.

>>15370412
this is angst-posting

>>15370649
be the prose critic you want to see. also: *than in the third line. bitch.

>>15370661
I feel like this is good but suffers from a glaring lack of pace. try to mix in some amount of ACTIVE drama to spice it up. But good.

>>15371474
wonderful poem. great idea with parallel spacing. really good!!

>>15371637
refer to my critique on imagery, mainly because you're obviously the same person.

>>15373415
wasn't effective at all. don't know what you were going for. forgetting about it soon.

>>15375666
good idea, but a little too...traditional? I feel like this could benefit from opening up from already well-treaded form