/lit/ - Literature

So much feedback eem. Thank you! Im the same anon that's developing "The Lost Daughter of Aine" and so many perspectives on this I'll respond

>>19359583
Yes i agree completely. I've dropped the reincarnation theme and while it may seem clichéd with the backstory being dark. I do think it lies into the execution that will make it truly special.

I think with my protagonist showing the slow burn or slow transformation from a hero to antagonist should be slow with choices that are morally ambiguous and she lets her hatred of the iken tribe govern her decisions. I'd like to see a protagonist go from a hero to a Sociopathic tyrant through her decisions and actions. Ashlynn is a child though and i'd like to see her face forces that force her to make no win choices that will eventually be called the child sex slave. This character will come up later on in the second arc but Ashlynn will give the boy the name Blaine and gradually become close companions with one another.

Also for the allmother explanation I was fuckign tired as hell and I didnt give a more through and concrete explanation here my apologies. I do want to give inspiration for Aine from the Celtic goddess Aine but subvert it through a darker lens. Aine was the goddess of fertility and known as the lady of the lake, but I'm afraid I don't really know how to really communicate what her reasons for corrupting Ashlynn and awakening her magical powers. Perhaps it could be that Aine is jealous and vain Goddess that has a short temper when offended. her influence over the continent was lessening as the result of the Iken tribe's conquest and plundering of the Aelic people which Ashlynn was a member of. And she grew more resentful as her forests, animals, and the fairies were cleaved and wiped out by the Iken, and maybe by seeking a suitable candidate to corrupt and become the hero that Aine will overrun the continent with her vegetation and fairies. Ashlynn is the key component in this as Aine believes that children are malleable and interpret the fantastical more intuitively than adults. So it could be that the beginning I could illustrate the temptations of the lake Aine uses to further manipulate Ashlynn to dive into, and it could serve as the place that will show the developing of Ashlynn's powers.

I hope it makes sense and it comes offas better than the first time around but I'm willing to revise as needed.

>>19359770
I understand the sentiment, but i think in the time period it is in and also the type of stories I want to make, I just really like fucked up shit. I think it all relies on the execution here to truly make a living piece of art and its the type of story i wish i could read more of in my opinion.