/lit/ - Literature

>>2042936
>>2042936

> mfw just two days ago I overheard two chicks talking to a guy about his major
> "I'm thinking something related to aerospace."
> she gestures a rocketship while inquiring " What got you into space studies?"
> mfw

I come here to share and critique writing, talk about books I've actually read, and get new book options from other threads.

I...thought that's what we all did.

>>2029172
>>2029172

Well, look, for example - this is another poem where I do similar, though it has garnered a better response from most readers than the previous:

North
First
down, the rain,
off-beat the cobbles near a still;
rushing or man-made pools.

Swells typhoon quietly;
dark swallows engulf the sky.

Drown us in these umbrella towns.

"These people fish outside mountains,"
on our disfiguring end with
rock-side fester marks in mist.

Inside, eroding faces above,
the sky fell down on us before haven,
and, Outside, rejoiced.


Do you find this poem unclear? Am I still working a rigid and awkward format?

Huh, this looks interesting.

That looks fine.

I mean, you could change it to "What are their interests?" to avoid the preposition...but no, no, it looks alright.