/lit/ - Literature

It's been a while since I last posted but If any of you guys are willing to give this a read I'd appreciate the criticism.
I've thought about throwing this whole thing out at some point but decided to finish it and I've got about 10k more words to go before I wrap it up.
I've gone over it many times trying to touch up words and other things here and there, but right now I would really like some hard criticism or advice based on how It's going.
I'm starting to see the appeal of an editor, but I'm obviously not going to get one for my very first book.
I have a bunch of other ideas I want to make books on but I really want to finish this story first. Hopefully I can fix some of my biggest mistakes or bad habits before getting started on that, though.

https://www.royalroad.com/fiction/67519/corvid
Royal road seems to be mostly LitRPG and Isekai stuff. Is there another site I can try to get feedback?

Any anons know a website I can post my stuff on to show others and get criticism and advice?