/lit/ - Literature

>>19321081

just read that section. Its interesting that, to me at least, it depicts people of an earlier time's horror at what is now a basic component. That while we have autonomy over ourselves we are still reducible to predictable patterned behavior and that includes our intimacy. What interests me about The Wasteland is it describes the beginnings of the numbness that are fully seated today. This isn't nearly as articulate as i'd like but im having to type with one hand just burned the other 20 minutes ago like an idiot.

>>11419173
>>11419177
WHO

>>8517415
A confederacy of dunces

>>8140081
>spicy
Are you fucking 12?
You have to be 18 to use this site.

I went to the library last night and did a reading. My piece wasn't very long and I spent the last half hour reading my book's 1-star reviews on Amazon.

I need a break.

I want to turn The Legacy of Totalitarianism in a Tundra into a screenplay. Are you guys interested?

>>7419758
"hot"

>>6250714

It was kind of amusing. The tone reminded me of pic related. I think it would be interested to see a story with that sort of bizarre tone throughout. There is a place for poops jokes in the literary world as well.

So, I'm going to treat this as a non-joke. You have too many clauses in some of those sentences and they don't really work grammatically in places.

>Donny looked at her, laughing at how bad the whole room stunk from her shit, mashed around the sheets all night from drunk-sleep tossing, accepting that he probably needed to buy a new mattress.

This could be three sentences easily and it would reach much better. To be frank, you just need to learn how to write a sentence. It's easy stuff. Just get yourself a basic style guide and make sure to read things aloud. Including your punctuation. You'll see how that quoted sentence is barely comprehensible.

You also need to be consistent with your tone. Don't make it sound clever or boring. It's a ridiculous story.
>Donny stood by the shower, shaking his head, waiting for hot water.
Why? I don't care. Don't tell me about the thunder or "grumbling-rumblings". If you've got a story about a guy smearing shit on the wall you've got to keep it funny or else it's a boring story with gross shit thrown into it.

You also need to be more clear. I wasn't sure what was going on in a lot of it. It will be better once you've fixed your sentences but don't leave any mystery unless you're really sure it works.