/lit/ - Literature

>>16818035
>Verbose stuff has a very small appeal. It can be good, but the problem is that it literally takes more effort to read a verbose sentence. If the reader doesn't know if your book is worth reading, they'll see dense wordage and feel repelled.
I know.

>Also, thinking of how to concisely present the point of your paragraph will help you hone the overall theme/meaning of your writing.
The problem is that the theme/meaning is not at all concise kek. Literally, an adult man with no development emerges as a newborn baby inside of a woman that isn't his mother and overanalyzes his impulses and enviroment as a way to overtake control of them. The fact that the narrator is in first person instead of a omnipresent thirdperson complicates it even more.

>TL;DR WAKE ME UP INSIDE