/lit/ - Literature

>>3438456
>Implying there aren't worse books than Twilight

>>3438450
You know you don't have to sage on here, we're not on /b/
No one had to know you posted the first time and are defending yourself

>>3438400
Join BP

>>3438421
Say the name aloud, slowing down slightly over the ll's, pushing your tongue slightly harder against the roof of your mouth than normal

>Mack's a *mill*ion

You may have to put more emphasis on the 'll's than you normally do, as if you were rolling 'r's, but I'd be surprised.

>>3353585
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iYGYokP18oU

im willing to exchange letters with someone using canada post. maybe international if youre cool.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3KgpEru9lhw
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Bol%C3%A9ro
average reading speed :250 words per minute
17minute movement, repeated theme
theme length : n/a
repitition: 19?
inspiration:
>"Tension is provided by the contrast between the steady percussive rhythm, and the "expressive vocal melody trying to break free"
note:
>"While on vacation at St Jean-de-Luz, Ravel went to the piano and played a melody with one finger to his friend Gustave Samazeuilh, saying "Don't you think this theme has an insistent quality? I'm going to try and repeat it a number of times without any development, gradually increasing the orchestra as best I can."[3] This piece was initially called Fandango, but its title was soon changed to "Boléro".[3]
loltechno

idea:to ravel's bolero, to write a short screenplay about repetitive attempts to 'break free' by different individuals/beings/things,
'building' in parallel to rising crescendo, transitioned by constant snare drum rhythm

>>2564840
Computer got lazy and offered queen exchange. But he's materially ahead (but he's low-level too, so that says alot about you), but your pawn position could determine end game.

My suggestion:
Do a pawn push on queen side, try to capture his bish.

>>2566576
Here's some pointers from my ex.

Purple is me, she is pink.

* Start from top to bottom.
* Describe details. Make sure you include her supposed reaction. What you would do.
* Use adjectives sparingly

Good luck

>self-worth dependent on other's opinion of himself

>>2524423
Thanks for the critique.

I tried finding a way not to repeat heaven twice, too, but came up short. But for the purposes of this poem (to woo a wench) it worked.

Actually you're right, the first few lines was inspired by Byron.

Thanks!

>50% games tax
>America

She glides in grace, like snow fall,
A glimmering gaze of sunset,
Passing by, the fools enthralled,
Their knees undone and swept,
Of trees, the breeze so sweet,
A beauty never seen, never felt,
And things of norm by day,
Are bent, her voice persuades,

Heaven remains a mystery,
Sought by men of all,
Her smile is like a simile,
A glimpse of heaven below,
So soft, so mellow, her cheek,
Calm like an ocean unmoved,
If only a poem could prove,
Of how she stands, so unique,
So high, so sweet, her brow,
Her love, so innocent, so free like a cloud

I feel your poem ends rather too soon. Otherwise, well done.

Anything overused is bad.

You can't blame the film for appealing to the sense of sound. It's not cheating if we're inclined to fall for it anyway, we just attach meaning to music too much.

Allude her to beauty to nature
Her actions to 'natural accidents'
like walking in the park... I don't know make it seem like she's blessing the grass and trees with her presence and pretty much what this anon said >>2517868
Don't be afraid to go all corny :)

>>2518518
No.. We ended it because we just lost love for each other. It was a peaceful break up actually.

>>2518488
Thanks mate!

>>2518459
Yeah.. I've learned not to write poems for my significant other after at least two years into the relationship.

Too many of my exes hold my works (all six of them)

Here's what I wrote for my ex-girl

She glides in grace, like snow fall,
A glimmering gaze of sunset,
Passing by, the fools enthralled,
Their knees undone and swept,
Of trees, the breeze so sweet,
A beauty never seen, never felt,
And things of norm by day,
Are bent, her voice persuades,

Heaven remains a mystery,
Sought by men of all,
Her smile is like a simile,
A glimpse of heaven below,
So soft, so mellow, her cheek,
Calm like an ocean unmoved,
If only a poem could prove,
Of how she stands, so unique,
So high, so sweet, her brow,
Her love, so innocent, so free like a cloud

Don't use poems to bring you out of trouble. Trust me I've learned the hard way.

You should use it sparringly, like a little random note in the morning or something.

19
About 30 or so; mostly fiction. Lot's of non fiction stuff on my computer though.