/lit/ - Literature

>>8325469
man, this book was unpredictable. Wdym anon? The scat scene in the first book on the first chapter was a doozy

>>8310712
this

>>8308277
I got fucked up earlier today, but didn't write anything unfortunately. But I feel like shit right now, so I guess its inspirational. But I feel like to be something I must destroy myself

Did I do good /lit/? What are your favorite poets?

>>8310582
>its shit

What makes it shit, I don't understand /lit/ and literally cant anymore. They want something different, so I make a short horror story. Very short and to the point for a reader that has a low attention span. Any normal person would understand what it's about without having to reread. Sorry I didn't throw any victorian, tongue-tied, autistic words on to a paper to make you seem above your superiority complex

>>8309978
"No"

If you cant get through 300 pages of talking about earth boxes to get to the cinematic ending and the heroic last pages. Then frankly, youre a pleb.

>>8310535
its called a short story :^). I wrote it for fun but I liked it, you probably would too if I didn't use my trip name

>mfw I cut out huge chunks just to fit under 1000 words

>>8310383
I'm going to school to be a English teacher, whats it like? Is it fun? Do other teachers like you?

>>8308044
Thanks, I felt that too. But I posted without my trip name so id have unbiased opinions.

I noticed afterwards that I had several grammar errors, which I was smacking myself in the face for. I see your point with the syntax, some of these sentences don't go together as well as others. Thanks

>>8303282
okay buddy okay

>>8298617
then you have an unbiased opinion

>>8298586
Well I like BDSM since I was 14, and its good erotica on some part. But I honestly think that romance can be compared to sci fi.
>men read sci fi to escape world problems
>women read romance because they love the fantasy of having a rich, strong, and handsome man

Kinda the same but not the same senpai

>>8298423
Because romance and drama are the type of interests in women. But you don't like that type of writing, just like women don't like sci fi or escapism type books.

>50 shades of grey was a pretty good movie (sorry)

>>8296413
ITS ONLY A DREAM FOR ME

>>8295159
They don't smell like doo doo, from my experience they have a faint musky smell, but in a perverse way it turns you on.

>when I was 16 my gf let me put my face up her ass

>>8292236
obviously not everyone thinks I suck, I get good critique from time to time. Especially on this one

BIRDS ARE LESSONS

When they grow they fly
Their chirp progressive,
To dwindle in the sky
Beautiful songs they carry aray
From the dusk to the dawn
To the end of the day

Sweet love that battles on and on
In the trees, undisturbed
Above the lawn
The babys they carry but not for long
Till they hit an age
When they must move on

They're dependent but so independency
Makes the best of what they'll be
Birds eat all the worms and hunt for feed
They sparkle around the globe and see
The beautiful nature, and travesties
They buddy in warmth on the polelines of streets
Which sway and wave at the wind of car speed

But when their children were birthed
But not so naturally, a human touched their heads
Now the momma can't smell her tweet
Human destroyed the nest
And tore down the tree
Now the babies die, because of insensitivity
Momma bird cries, but she still stands on her feet
She'll wait in life for another oppertunity

Her death she waited, but happy and patiently
She takes it with grace and moves up and beyond to heavens entry
With smiles all around, and gold polelines on gold streets
She found her little ones, she kisses her tweets

>>8291006
Rodger the Dodger

>>8288164
>this is really food
kek. Thanks pal, glad you liked it. xx

Birds are lessons
When they grow they fly
Their chirp progressive,
To dwindle in the sky
Beautiful songs they carry aray
From the dusk to the dawn
To the end of the day

Sweet love that battles on and on
In the trees, undisturbed
Above the lawn
The babys they carry but not for long
Till they hit an age
When they must move on

They're dependent but so independency
Makes the best of what they'll be
Birds eat all the worms and hunt for feed
They sparkle around the globe and see
The beautiful nature, and travesties
They buddy in warmth on the polelines of streets
Which sway and wave at the wind of car speed

But when their children were birth
But not so naturally, a human touched theyre heads
Now the momma can't smell her tweet
Human destroyed the nest
And tore down the tree
Now the babies die, because of insensitivity
Momma bird cries, but she still stands on her feet
She'll wait in life for another oppertunity

Her death she waited, but happy and patiently
She takes it with grace and moves up and beyond to heavens entry
With smiles all around, and gold polelines on gold streets
She found her little ones, she kisses her tweets

>>8283764
Thanks for the constructive criticism. I'll make the changes and post a revised version/ I might want to take some time to edit because this is the 50th page, and I know I'll have more.
>btw this is what I meant by the glass

>>8283653
Thanks. xx