/lit/ - Literature

>>4779591
Thank you. "This is the pen" is literally about trying to write "This is the pen". I think it is the most honest poem I've ever written. Confining myself to a structure is the only difference between my prose and poetry. For instance, my other post "Life of a Poem" took me awhile to the get the progression as 6,5,4,8,8,6 and the rhyme scheme A,B,B,C,C,A. Every word, punctuation, and negative space was carefully chosen. For instance the first draft had "me as a whore" but that wouldn't have contradicted the last line, though the last line is technically not a metaphor. I also had wanted every line to stand alone as an analogy for the "life of a poem" so that you could rip it apart, or read it from the end to the start and still only get one meaning. Add some irony as a little cherry, because as someone pointed out everyone writes an ars poetica. I think it does a wonderful job for what I wrote it for: a way to start arguments with humanity majors.

>>4778978
I like the idea, it just needs to be cleaned up. Like the first stanza seems has the 'motion' of waking up. On little step (little line) at a time until you rush to the bathroom. Then slow back down with the pill. Why does line 10 have two watches and line 11 only 1. the and line can go. Instead maybe use a semicolon at the line break to emphasize the pause. Another thing could be ".... slow, / steady / work my way / (???(I'm not sure, but I think you can do better)) / ....".

Contributing more: "Crap"

I've lost my muse;
inspiration burnt up
like a used fuse.

My soul is an empty cup;
with nothing to lose
I rhyme with a hiccup.

I know this is poetical abuse,
but that is what is up
when you can not find words to use.

>>4117619

Hi Mr Dahl thanks for the bedtime stories, I thought you were dead and your story was longer

>>4031810

smaller sample pls

>>4031605

cur tu me afflixis

>>4031237

Beautiful, although you did send me off to bed on a sad note because my head is now full of somebody who had handwriting as nice as yours.

>>4030264
More than a couple of years off, but yes, I am a girl.

>>4030238

Okay, shopping's been postponed so can you guys guess my gender or date of birth from this from the angle of my writing or some jazz like that?

I'm going shopping, there better be handwriting experts ready to analyse my writing when I get back. Please don't 404.

>>4028657

Ditto. Goodnight.

>>4028606

I was at best indifferent to everything except oldfag /lit/izen. I wish I had a name to the poems, but that's not possible to uncover I suppose. Thank you.

>>4028583

Thank you for sharing this.

>>4028579

http://icanswimbuticant.tumblr.com/

>>4028571

I see "When Jesus Walks in Belfast" on here, I'm assuming it's the writer's tumblr account.

>>4028562

Cheers m8, any possibility of reading these poems? Does s/he have a website?

>>4027077

It gave me a very specific kind of feel. Brilliant job.

>>4024799

Ulysses is a shit novel, very thrid rate

>>4022792

You made an error when naming the file.

I also made an error by forgetting to attach the file entirely.

Accept Islam: The Story of America and Immigrants

That was easy.

>>4022278

He's a blogger, so basically my work is shit.

Cory Doctorow?

"But what good is life when reason stops and men run wild? Why pluck your baby from the spike or draw your lover from the murky well?"

>>3877893
>>3877895
sam here

>>3871142

Because over-analysis.
This kills the work.

But have you read his poems? Some of them are really short, I doubt you wrote your report on them.

>>3871113

I highly doubt any other poets will satisfy, but it was worth a try. I mentioned the fact that it was Gothic, well, because Poe was Gothic. But you're right, and if you can recommend any other poets that I would enjoy I would be very happy regardless of whether it was Gothic.