/lit/ - Literature

>>6712533
>>6712616

It's all good, I went ahead. Does your character want to be a cuck deep in his mind? Honest question, because the work screams cuckoldry.

>>6705325
The whole thing seems a sashay swaggering the edge of Sid's routine stroll from work (?) to wherever... his train of thought even sways back and forth along with the passage of his time in retrospective, too absorbed in how he established his amble than where it goes.

>>6712289

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Serayite,
or the Curious Frottage ‘twixt the Langue and the Parole

Ghazy Loon

©2015

To my soon-expir’d Teenage,
With its perverted Hope and its seminal Destiny,
to Columbia Intrinsic with her divers representations,
and to Maria Mondragon


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DISSEMINATE.

…Thus shall exist the boy in himself,
and shall this motive suffice to satiate his sum…

So unfolds the sacred Soliloquy,
the Forefront of epic Vantage…
His ink spatter'd Quell bewails
its timeless Incontinence,
almost sucks the Purpose
from its own blackened Nib
to avoid pinning one Paragraph,
for its sooty Tip resting frozen Pigment
proves itself too obtuse
to penetrate the harlequin Parchment
only a Soul can tangiate,
too blunt to define
the angstrom Edges
of the child's holy Monad,
not so cursive
as to capture the all-one-seething-Noise
by its Contours
on conscience's Cartography;
Alas! Colossus-unto-himself
tediously dissolved into Phonetics,
whipped to Charms by ascending ox Goads,
stored to Smolders by Phylacteries of four-prong'd Fire
'til he reminisces naked over his Destruction,
only to be teleported Sublime to Entities unfathomable…
inhabit a remote Cortex reassembl’d…

Since I can't even put a fucking pastebin link on here without getting b&, I will put my latest work, Serayite, book-by-book on this thread.

This is a combination of a concentrated effort to make a book while I was 19, an earlier work I wished to publish that was unfinished (about three years ago), and some miscellaneous stuff from freshman year of high school. Serayite was published about a week or less before I turned 20.

For the much better versions of Serayite, look up "serayite" on Google and it will be the first result, from smashwords.

It also comes with a separate companion commentary to provide better understanding of what is being said (link in the title page of the recommended version, both books are free btw).

In return for your comments (thank you graciously), I will certainly comment on every work in this thread that I can, mostly the gist I get from what you wrote.

Regards,
Ghazy Loon